Your piece is full of descriptions like this, but this one stuck out to me. It gave so much of her state of being because her body language was so clearly yet effortlessly described.

You know, I've been toying around with fiction lately and you are one of the writers I think about when it comes to setting a scene. I'm not able to do it like you can, but I find the mental reference I have of your writing to be a good measuring stick to see how far I have to go haha right now it's quite far.

Anyway, it was a joy to flow down the page of this one and I'm looking forward to reading the next part.

Thanks, Jay!